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Post by VaderStark14 on May 29, 2015 19:15:12 GMT -5
I have 8 Book, Script or whatever Story Ideas. I will Poll list the titles and do An Opening 2 Pages Of Each Story In the course of 6 weeks.
1 The Shadow Knights Of The Rebellion. A Star Wars Avdenture.
2 The Highwaymen.
3 Van Helsing. The Last Templer Knight.
4 The Dragon Horn.
5 Keldor The True Story Of Skeletor.
6 The Black Thorn Raiders.
7 Blood Rangers.
8 Raven: The True Story Of Mystique.
Will Do First Two Pages of Idea 1 By Tomarrow. I will Post The Poll after I release all 8 Story Ideas.
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Post by Hollywood on May 29, 2015 19:45:38 GMT -5
1 or 8 i would say.
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Post by VaderStark14 on May 29, 2015 20:28:17 GMT -5
Shadow Knights Of The Rebellion.
Sometime Before Order 66 A Secret Meeting Was Held On Tatooine Far From The ears of Hutts Minions.
Two Men cloked in Robes One had a Jedi Golden Saber. He Stood Taller then the other who Wielded of all Things a Sith Saber Weapon Only he was shorter and more rounder. A Smaller Cloked Figure Appeared. "Now The Time Has Come Voltress now Jedi and Sith are no more. Only those who have lost there way remain." "I am not the best person on the morals of Jedi my master but I doubt Yoda would agree all hope is lost." "There be no need to bring My Father In This. Now Is The Time Of Secrets and Shadow for now will be the Time Of Sidious. Th Force Need Us To Take This Path. Have You Chose Your New Apprentices." "Yes My Master I've chose a Sand person Named Gree. "I Too Have Chosen Padwan who will one day see a better time to be a force wielder. Only Problem is she is loyal to the jedi." "Yes but if she is who I know Master Windu will cause the council to mistrust her."
"Now then the time is go and train your Apprentices You Must." Where will you be master Yo Jinn." "Where we all must be. Hidden like Shadows we must be."
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Post by RedStorm901 on May 30, 2015 0:16:02 GMT -5
I would like to read number 3 or 8.
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Post by VaderStark14 on May 30, 2015 5:51:54 GMT -5
Zambarie Voltress was born 37 years before the incident on Naboo on the planet Moon In The Hoth System.It was a very cold place full of snow beasts. He was found there because the freighter with his parents had crashed and all were killed by Trade Federation droids but in these days they couldn't even say roger and were painted green for some reason. Zambarie was found by Count Dooku on the cold planet when felt a trimmer in the force. Dooku secretly kept him on Yavin .
When he was old enough Zambarie discovered his abilities were towards the dark side and Dooku was dabbling in those forbidden arts.
Zambarie never questioned what was right or wrong he just knew the force was changing around Dooku. After the death of Qui Gon Jinn the only Jedi who knew Dooku Had a pupil after retirement. Zambarie saw Dooku fully commit too the dark side. One night Dooku turned on him with the two belief that Darth Bane established. Voltress escaped by using a force Ball. He was a deep meditator and learned to create the force into a shield.
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Post by VaderStark14 on May 30, 2015 18:15:06 GMT -5
Zambarie decided too create a Sith or Rather Dark Jedi weapon for Voltress was filled with too much hate and anger. One day he heard a noise and saw 3 alien kids trapped between Droid and Clone fire and he used his Saber on both sides and lifted the downed cruiser shielding the kids from death. "This wreckless war is whats evil but i fear the old ways will be gone forever." One of the 3 children was a 6 year old boy named Han Solo son of Freight Pilot Emma Solo. She was from Mandelore. "You are a Jedi." "No no just someone who can use the force." Voltress was able to stay in Mandelore in hiding. Fast forward too 3 days before Ahsoka left the Jedi order. Or rather just did not except there retraction of expolsion.
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Post by VaderStark14 on May 31, 2015 12:51:37 GMT -5
Zambarie kidnapped Jedi Padwan Offee. He spent hours sowing her mental imagines of things seen in the force. Unknown and True events and she could not resisit his mind force manipulation. We both know it was you who betrayed the council. You know the truth but lack the wisdom too react properly. You blame the Jedi who are trying to keep the peace in war time." What do you want?" You will not run you will go to the temple and wait for Master Skywalker to find you. You will not remember me and once you see Skywalker you will be free of my mind control."
"You have no power too make me go for I will escape." "Awe I think you will obey my instructions or you will die like this." Voltress raises his hand and she levitates upwards with her bindings and he force chokes her. "So hard to breath when your lungs and wind pipe is closeing. To hear the cracking of the bones as your lungs are starving for air. Then again I could just make you submit this way so you dont die a cowards death. He sets her down in the chair. "I truly hate copying his methods but as they say your learn by example."
Voltress uses his force Lightning on her which was in a golden light not blue like Palpatines. "Yes this hurts but then again you could die like a jedi or die like the stupid fool you are."
Please no more just stop. "Good now you can see my way of things. He waves his hand. You will go to the jedi Temple. "I will Go To The jedi temple. " "You will wait for Skywalker." I will wait for Skywalker." "You will not remmeber me." "I will not remember you." She leaves as her shackles are released He goes to the holding area and sees Ahsoka in a cell.
Hardly a place fitting for a future Commander of The New Rebellion.
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Post by Doomsday on May 31, 2015 13:30:19 GMT -5
I have 8 Book, Script or whatever Story Ideas. I will Poll list the titles and do An Opening 2 Pages Of Each Story In the course of 6 weeks.
1 The Shadow Knights Of The Rebellion. A Star Wars Avdenture.
2 The Highwaymen.
3 Van Helsing. The Last Templer Knight.
4 The Dragon Horn.
5 Keldor The True Story Of Skeletor.
6 The Black Thorn Raiders.
7 Blood Rangers.
8 Raven: The True Story Of Mystique.
Will Do First Two Pages of Idea 1 By Tomarrow. I will Post The Poll after I release all 8 Story Ideas.
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Post by IanTheCool on May 31, 2015 18:31:26 GMT -5
Woah, that font is not easy on the eyes.
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Post by VaderStark14 on May 31, 2015 19:05:30 GMT -5
"Seems too me a sorry place to be a jedi." "Who are you?" Nobody of consequence but i think your master has taken you as far as you can in being a jedi a force for good." "The council dont trust me and so who can I be even if found not guilty." "You will not be found guilty either way and i must ask you a difficult thing. If you are invited back in the order you must refuse. Say your unsure if its the right path if anyone asks." '' Master Plo will reguardless hate me.
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"Hate is not the jedi way. but then again I am no jedi nor would I expect you to grasp what I really want my new aprrentice." "What makes you think I would call you master." "Trust me to be my apprentice requires you to be more then you are now."
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Post by VaderStark14 on Jun 2, 2015 23:41:32 GMT -5
Zambarie had snuck into the room where they were having Ahsoka on trial. He looked around the room at the faces of light and dark. His eyes focused on the Sith Lord. Then over to aging Yoda. He left the court room and went into the jedi temple he was observing the new padwan jedi on file. He made a copy of them for his master. "Excuse me but do I know you." "Been a long time Obi Wan." " Voltress what are you doing in a sacred temple."
He looks around to the Jedi standing in a row all former masters and great jedi of the order. In the old days people came to the temple to pay homage too great heroes of legend that jedi was based from. Bontu Sitmus the very first Whill Jedi or as we now call it Whatever Mast Yoda is.
Anyway you must ask yourself ObI Wan are your really ready for this to end for soon the lights of the place will go out and all you will hear is the empty dark halls.
I tell you now if Palpatine wins we all lose. I have seen the future and war will not end even if all the droid no longer hold a plaster rifle. Awe I would not turn my Back on your pal Commander Cody."
"I am placing you under arrest." "For what Master Kenobi ghosts do not exist and as far as the world knows that by you knew on Yavin no longer lives but nor does he wish the life of a sith. Its a burden to to appear to be evil my old friend."
Obi Wan starts to move and his wrist comlink turns on. "Master Kenobi we may need you here to reason with Skywalker assuming the verdict is guilty." "Wait master I have." Zambarie vanished and ObI Wan left for the hearing chamber.
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Post by Deexan on Jun 5, 2015 1:20:40 GMT -5
This is gold.
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Post by VaderStark14 on Jun 5, 2015 18:52:35 GMT -5
I have two more entries before I move on to option story two.
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Post by VaderStark14 on Jun 6, 2015 2:40:19 GMT -5
The whole trial and Barriss reveal goes down as planned which seemed like the dark side always has full plans while Jedi more or less adapted too whatever happened. But what made there ways clash with the order was fighting a war when jedi purpose was to keep peace and fight dark force users. Voltress was waiting in a dark alley talking too the taller jedi who was on there side. "The trial is over with a full pardon for Ahsoka was it nessasary to put her at odds."
"What do you know of her?" "I've known who Ahsoka was since we met all those years ago." "Then you know we need some padwans too choose to leave now before the darkness comes and devours all." "I shall be taking my new padwan too a place in the outer rim. May the force keep you and little Ahsoka." "May the force keep you Master Plo."
Plo Koon was the jedi who joined the Shadow as it is called. Plo was a jedi who did nothing unwise or hastily. Master Koon saw enough fighting in his time but his master believed that Senators have no place amongst jedi because they cause more death and poverty by votes. Master Plo saw weaknesses in the Clone troopers as puppets that seemed different yet programmed to adapt and appear man like.
Master Voltress was repairing a bad motivator in a r2 old model. Voltress seemed at easy amongst droids and anything mechanical. His comlink buzzed and floating med droid . Its time for your appointment with Ahsoka my master." "Thank you Voss but i am aware of the time. I imagine she has a choice too make and rushing her after she just gave up being a jedi. Sometimes ones only alley is ones own council."
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Post by VaderStark14 on Jun 9, 2015 20:45:38 GMT -5
Voltress Knocks out a guard and takes his uniform and staff. He helps Anakin stp Barriss escape attempt. Yoda was tired and during Ahsoka's end of the trail. "Would you be good enough to take me to the Jedi temple. Yoda sits in the speeder and Voltress in disguise drives.
"You are not temple Guardian for too short you are. "There are all kinds of jedi are they not master Yoda." "Yes but most guard does not wonder will Ahsoka not pursue a path of a jedi." "Why should she want to be you did not or rather master Windu did not choose to believe a padwan. If your do not trust a sister then how can an order survive. Just a pondering question."
"I sense anger in you a Jedi does not have nor do I sense a bad man in you." "I also know Dooku's turn was not your fault but the need for more power was always a part of his interest." "Thank you for ride I do. But we need her too for lost much we have in this war."
"Master the War will go on for the war against Droids and Clones is just a cover the war for all free people is only beginning."
""Safe can you Keep Padwan Tano." "What have you seen that makes you ask." "Much but no of it is clear to me. Lost my way have I." "sometimes the force contacts you master. Perhaps should listen more and try less harder." Voltress is resting when the door opens and Ahsoka gets in. "I am nothing now. Betrayed all the people who ever believed in me." "No my Padwan that would be your old master." "What do you mean?" "Awe nothing just a minor glimps to an uncertain future. Keep your mind her and now." "Where are we going?" "To the Whill home world." "Thats on the other side of Naboo."
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Post by VaderStark14 on Jun 11, 2015 19:03:14 GMT -5
I know said only two pages but sometimes gotta do more to get an idea what a story is. Will Be doing one of the other selections in about 10 minutes.
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Post by VaderStark14 on Jun 11, 2015 19:25:37 GMT -5
Blood Rangers.
When people started to settle west they assumed that worst things imaginable were Indian Savages, Bandits or Dying of thurst is the water hole was dry. This is the story of 4 men and two women. Bounty Hunters who were given a job by Sam Houston and they would be called the Blood Legion.
For many years the Apachy spoke of shadow beasts that stole ones blood and sometimes there soul during the night. Many believed Indians moved to fallow the Buffalou or deer herds but in fact they moved because another hunted was out there and once they were seen you had but 3 nights to leave or the women or children and taken but all that was found was the dead bodies on spears left for the birds to finish off.
The Mexicans called them blood stealers. The Trappers called them Bloods. Our story begins with the Bounty Hunter James Weston who would be considered the white night of this tale. A former Yankee Calvery Officer who found no work after the war so he picked up bounty hunting. He was on the move for the gambler and shootist Ace Cash who wore a nice vest and dressed neat with his black hat and suit. He always traveled by horse for Cahs did not trust his fellow coach companions. His fire was warm and Weston was nearing him. "I would not stay too far back Lt for its not save in the dark away from sage fire."
"Your under arrest." "That so funny i dont see a badge anywhere and id not advise a bounty hunter draw a gun on me for i hate rude ass monkeys who point guns at me since that Sheriff in Elpaso."
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